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Marina by anna-solitaire Marina by anna-solitaire
That's my "after" piece for Before and After Competition


well, i dunno what i gotta do with her hair to make her look prettier
although it seems to me that's one of my best works )
some WIPs here : [link]
and here : [link]


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racketify Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Student General Artist
This is the feedback frenzy contest 2
All the detail here is perfect the way that it is. The shading you did right for the most part. The hair could have some more shading, but even without it. It still look really good no matter what. The face detail is perfect and especially the cheek bone. You added perfect amount of lightning on the facial feature and this is a job well done.
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olivegbg Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hi there, I'm writing this critique as part of the #FeedbackFrenzy contest.
This is one of those images where you can feel it's a real person looking right at you, credits to you for capturing this. Technically I think the hair on her forehead is the strongest part of this image. Here you have managed to get both volume and contrast. Why ask what to do with her hair, you know already...;) As for improvements, she needs a stronger background shading to make her face pop out of the paper. You might also consider using a really soft gum (I guess you know this already, but just in case, there are gums that you can kneed into exactly the form you want and that does almost nothing to damage the paper). I would also suggest making a few individual strands of hair in her eyebrows to make them more realistic.

All in all, an image with great potential. Keep up the good work!
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liyaperfidious Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012
Hello! This is =liyaperfidious, a participant in the :iconfeedbackfrenzy: contest.
Here is my critique:

It's a well drawn cheery portrait! Her smile is so pure.
The shading is good, especially at the cheeks, they really follow the contour of the face.
The details of the strands of the hair is admirable.
Her eyes are definitely her best feature.
The only thing that is visibly off is the shading of the hair at the outer parts.
It gets a bit shabby outside there and doesn't really show the tones of her hair.
Some parts look really glossy so I'd assume there's a dramatic light source but at the same time the shading evolves to become less glossy so it confuses me as the viewer.
The left part of the neck has an unknown darker part which I believe would be the shaded area, but it is quite abrupt.
Try giving it a more gradient tone, like what you did with the right part which looks fine.
As for where the portrait ends, it is a bit abrupt.
Giving a faded out tone would help to make it look natural.
There is also a black line at the top left part of the paper and it is ever so visible.

Thanks for reading this! I hope I make sense and do not confuse you.
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jane-beata Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
Your work has been FEATURED, thank you for participating in Tuesday Feedback Hour :heart:

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anna-solitaire Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
and thanks for the feature!
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jane-beata Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
Beautiful drawing, quite emotional eyes. I like the brightness of this piece, although I think that shading on face could have been deeper, the face would really stand up. Overall, lovely work!
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anna-solitaire Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thanks!i appreciate your opinion)
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NikaKrae Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Professional Writer
Mmm, that lovely face. Damn, does she look like me (with different hair) or is it just me and my poor drink who think so... :faint:
Anyway, I'm very glad to see you improving during those last few months. I'm sure you're properly proud of yourself as you should be. Just don't fall asleep on laurels, all right?

Summary: Regarding the drawing itself, you know well you've quite outdone yourself. :clap: Lovely face, your shading is getting better, it looks realistic in general and I'd simply like to cuddle with her. One remark here - hairline above her forehead seems a bit odd. Maybe it shouldn't be drawn in one line as you did, but maybe it's just me. :smoking:
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anna-solitaire Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thanks for your comment, Nika
i'm definitely not going to fall asleep on laurels)cause i'm not proud of how i've done blond hair and other stuff..))
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NikaKrae Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Professional Writer
Oh, don't be hard on yourself, my sweet. Of course there's always some space for improvement, but that doesn't mean you should not look at this drawing and tell yourself "yeah, I totally nailed this one". :nod:
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anna-solitaire Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
well when i'm not satisfied with the result i always work harder to improve)
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praveenkoduri Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Student Photographer
hii... m a little artist just drawing with hb pencil.. nd i like to learn the realistic drawings like u drawn above.. can u tell me how todraaw those ..like the hair nd all .. i like to have a tutorial can u halp me please?
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anna-solitaire Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
hi, Praveen
well, as for me, when i draw hair i just remember that every pencil line is
a hair-spring
well maybe this video would help you with drawing hair - i watched it once upon a time)check out here:
[link]
you can find lots of tutorials here on DA:
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concerning skin, you can check out these tutors:
[link]
(these are my favourite ones:)
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by the way,when i started using some different pencils like 4B, 8B, 2H for sketches, some contrast appeared in my piece and i guess this has made it look more natural, especially hair
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praveenkoduri Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Student Photographer
thank u sooo much anna u gave me verry useful things which really help me .. thank u soo much ... can i keep in touch with u so that i can ask u doubts
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anna-solitaire Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
you're welcome)
of course you can!)
i'm really glad this was useful!
good luck to you!i'm looking forward to seeing your improvement)))
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UPlover Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is amazing!! I love it!
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anna-solitaire Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thanks)
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UPlover Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome!
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NavanaThePheonix Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
~~from GetWatchers~~
First off, I just wanted to say that your piece 'Marina,' blew me away. Your talent is well beyond the amateur level. I know its not easy drawing realism and you do it like a professional.

~~My critque~~
You drew this piece exceptionally well. Its truely hard to fine even the smallest mistake.
Unfortunently I do see some smudging at the bottom of the page. :( Unless you intended it, but I don't think you would considering how persist your shading is. I don't know if you are using this technique, but maybe try to advoid it by placing a cardboard ontop your picture while working so your hand doesn't get dirty and make sure to gently pick it up before moving it around to prevent spots or smuding.

I also see a darker black spot next to her laugh line on the left ( I'm positive that its not shading becasue its in the line of light so therefore it should be lighter.) Its still an unfinished piece so I can't completely judge it yet. But so far so good. I love how persist your shading is and where you put deatils like in the eyes. Which by the way are wind blowing. Every little detail in them is very accurate; from the eye shine to the dark shadows under her bottom eyelashes.

The antomony is right on, all of her muscles and bones are present in the picture. (Especially in the neck where you used a darker pencil to shade the skin that sinks inward.)

One thing that bothers me about her, is the top strand of hair that falls over her head. Its twisting and turning but at a random point it completely changes direction. Is it pinned up perhaps? Maybe its just my eyes, but I think its two strands of hair crossing. Never mind. My mistake. The top strand still bothers me though. Maybe its the way it vanishes behind her head. :(

~~Overall~~
Beautiful piece. I wish you the best of luck when finishing it and becareful about smudging.
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anna-solitaire Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
great critique!it's very much appreciated!
thank you!
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NavanaThePheonix Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem ^W^ Its the least i an do for such a great artist!
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TheEternalManga Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
awesome :D but there sure is quality loss coz of the scan right? :( i hate that :/
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anna-solitaire Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i didn't scan it
it's a photo
it's ugly, i know)
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TheEternalManga Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
oh :O even worse
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oopsitsbekah Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
stunning piece! especially for a pencil sketch this is so refined, the hair especially. also loving the eyes you can really see the depth; they're beautiful! the face shape's been captured perfectly no distortions or mishaps in the anatomy field haha. the only bad thing i can comment is that you should do more! ;) honestly no faults to be found, well done :3
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anna-solitaire Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thank you)) lol a haven't enough time to do more unfortunately )))
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oopsitsbekah Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
no worries c: please do hehe! ♥
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Pappengeimer Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Улыбка заразительная! =) Очаровательно! Рисунок заряжает оптимизмом!
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anna-solitaire Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
я старалась)))девушка сама по себе вдохновляющая))
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DragonPress Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012
beautiful! so soft :D
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anna-solitaire Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thank you)
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DragonPress Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012
your welcome ;D
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NiaTayn Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012
какой красивый рисунок, глаза прям как настоящие *о*
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anna-solitaire Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
спасибо)приятно очень)
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